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Friday, July 22, 2011

Revenge

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 22; the twenty-second edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.
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'Are you sure you don’t want to testify against him?? Ritika don’t worry, we are all here for you, you have identified the rest, and testified against them, why leave him out of it, are you listening?'

'My lord', said the Public Prosecutor 'he is forcing the witness to testify against my client. Mr.Kapoor,'

'Has your client identified all the accused in this case?' Asked the judge

'Ritika, ritika I’m here for you, the law will give him the punishment he deserves, ritika are you listening'…

At her lawyers touch, ritika was brought back from her thoughts,' Mr. Kapoor, I have identified all the accused, I don’t have anything against him'... She pointed out to a man, a very frail figure, who held up his hands in prayer towards her, with a smug smile, asking for forgiveness.

As the Victim has identified the accused….The Judge continued with the Punishment, when she silently moved away.

'Ritika, why would you not testify against your father, he is the prime accused in this case, what happened to you? Do you just want him to be left after all what he did to you, wasn’t this what you wanted?? That he gets punished?'

For the first time in 4 weeks, Abhishek Kapoor saw a smile on her face; she was always a Mystery, difficult to comprehend. He could still recall the first time he had met her, she was hollow from within, she asked him to help reprimand the people who had made her life the way it was. He shuddered at the thought of how her Father had forced her into prostitution.

He was drawn to the present with her sweet voice asking him as to when he would want his fees. He did not want to loose sight of her, because he knew he wouldn’t see her again.

'Ritika, why didn’t u testify against your father??? He was the one, who bought your life at this stage,'

'Mr.kapoor, there are certain thing that you wouldn’t understand. I wanted to know if my father would be able to face me and look me in the eyes, and well he could, after all what he has done, he could still look at me the way he always did,' she got lost in thoughts at mention of those words….

Abhishek saw her expressions harden at the very thought of her father. Ritika was drawn back to the day when her father had first touched her; she was 13 years old, her initial refusal to comply with her father’s demands ended up with her 5 year old brother being beaten up sore in front of her. She had to comply with having her father touch her, so as to stop him hurting her brother. That was the first time her father forced her into the bedroom, and later with many other people, her cries were unheard, her screams fell on deaf ears. She had lost her childhood.. she had lost herself .

She was 28 now. She was rescued by Human rights activists, and they had employed Mr. Kapoor as her advocate. She had testified against everyone she could remember, many of them were among the noted and respected men in the state.

'Ritika what have you planned about your future?'

She was bought back from her thoughts. She looked at him and presented him with a very mysterious smile and said, 'i'm not sure id want to mix your future with mine, but I’m sure my father’s future would collide with mine.'

Abhishek always had a tough time comprehending her words, and emotions. Ritika however, seemed to have read the very core of his emotions, and wanted to stray away from those very thoughts of his. She had something else in mind. She looked at abhishek and said' “I want to be God” for a day.'

Abhishek gave her a confused look as she mesmerized him with her laugh; he was surprised to see her laughing, even more surprised when her laughter was combined with tears. Ritika wiped away her tears, and took his leave, however before she did, she mentioned about having his fees reached at his office tomorrow, and asked him to promise her of not trying to find her whereabouts.

One Month later: Abhishek was taken aback by the Breaking News that was being shown on all prominent news channels; a dead body of a man, in his late fifties was found naked in a hotel room. He was stabbed around 30 times all over his body, a deep gash was found on his throat, his fingers, his genitals were cut, His Lips and his tongue were cut of, his eyes were poked into.

Reports stated that the man had sexual intercourse before he was castrated and murdered…. Abhishek was still listening to details of the murder when his phone rang, an unknown number, he answered the call, on the other end a female voice asked him to check the news channels, he recognized the voice…

'Ritika where are you, how have you been'...

'Abhishek, she cut him short saying, that was my father who was found dead… I played God for a day.'

He remained speechless, the line was disconnected, and it took him a moment to realize what he had heard. He understood her now, she had given her Father one chance to let her know that he was sorry, and when he didn’t, she didn’t feel sorry for him either. She had written her fathers destiny just like he had written hers.

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21 comments:

  1. Very dark and a nice storyline.. but it was ruined by a lack of formatting... Please do something about the formatting, italicizing some portions, spaces etc to make the post more legible!

    ATB for the BAT...

    Read mine at Revenge is best when served cold

    Regards Wandering Thoughts

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  2. Your fluid narrative underlines the potency of the emotions you have expressed-i can see how it was right to not structure the composition but to let it gush forth from one element to the next.
    As for the plot, it is revenge incarnate-very cruel, very sinister but very real.
    GREAT piece of writing-hope to see more of it in the days to come !!

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  3. Dark post... The emotions are nicely captured and I totally love your story.. Good luck.. Here is my post.. Oh this is.. ReVeNge

    Someone is Special

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  4. very dark and gloomy... But well justified 'revenge'.. the way you have expressed and carried the story line was really nice..

    All the best for BAT..

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  5. Hm... Been reading a lot of these cases in newspapers - of fathers raping daughters. You made a nice dark story out of it. Do check out my Blog-a-ton entry Revenge

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  6. ashish : Thankyou ashish. Yes i do agree with you about the formatting bit, being a bit new to certain aspects of blogging definitely has its flaws...but yes next time il try getting around with it..
    Brijender : thankyou brijesh, for the comment, I hope you will find more posts that would interest you in the coming days
    Somei\one is apecial :thankyou, and good luck to you too
    Sunil Padiyar : Thankyou for reading my story, and for the valuable feedback
    The Fool :Yes ,absolutely, such cases are of daily read.. hence that subject...Thankyou for going through it :)

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  7. You have elaborated one dark reality of our social life .. incest! Good words, good story.

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  8. aativas : Thankyou for the valuable comments, and yes like you have mentioned incest definitely is one dark reality of Society

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  9. Oh damn, that was good. Really, really good. There is justice too, in the way she gives him a choice. I'm glad she did that to him. I'm SO glad.

    Awesome entry, this:)
    Good luck!

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  10. priyanka : Im glad you liked it :) ...thankyou and wish you the same ...

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  11. Incest is a horrible crime and this way of Revenge is a fitting end to it. I agree with aashish on the formatting part, though.

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  12. A very poignant tale...but I guess the man got what he deserved... very well narrated

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  13. Shilpa :Thankyou.Yes definitely,in aativas's words incest id a dark reality of society, and i hope id learn and be better next time with regard to the formatting bit.

    Vikram Pyati : Thankyou, Im glad you agreed with the punishment meted out ..

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  14. child abuse that to by her own father :( .........i am glad she played GOD....he deserved it ....

    here is mine take a look

    the revenge of aparniyan- Revenge

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  15. @ the critics : Thank you :) ... and yes i have already gone through your post, you will find my comments :)

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  16. Oh wow .. that was amazing .. very well written ..in fact superb narration , that kept me hooked till the end ! Well written . The merciless killing is very well portrayed ! Beautifully dark one ! :)

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  17. @ adreamygal ; thankyou, im glad you liked it..:)

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  18. guess the above comments say it all.. the way the subject of incest has been handled is very gripping

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  19. of dem all id think dis was quite d darkestttttt post.
    n despite dat i din feel bad. gud fr him- dats all im thinkin rite nw. :-)
    oh n poor lawyer guy. feel so bad fr him. wrong number by a longggg shot! :D

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  20. @ Sadiya : thank you,and i must say you are only person who understood the plight of the lawyer :P .... aptly said..wrong number by a long shot ;)

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